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You recently noticed a local restaurant that was offering a part-time job. Write a letter to the restaurant's manager. In your letter, explain that you would like to apply for the job give some details of any relevant experience that you have specify the days and times that would suit you

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Dear Sir or Madam, I trust
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 message finds you well. I recently came across your advertisement for a part-time position at Burger King on a local job board. I am writing to express my interest in applying for
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 role as it aligns perfectly with my skills and availability. Currently, I am a student at Academic Excellence Academy, pursuing a diploma in Food Science. Alongside my education, I possess experience in the hospitality industry, having previously worked as a server at McDonald's for over a year. During my time there, I developed exceptional customer service skills and learned to thrive in a fast-paced environment, which I believe would benefit your team. In terms of qualifications, I hold a certification in food safety and handling from SQF which enhances my understanding of best practices in food service. I am available to work on weekdays after 3 PM and anytime during the weekends, making me a flexible candidate for the hours required. Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to the possibility of discussing my suitability for
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 role in
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 detail. Yours faithfully, Kurbonov Arthur
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Ensure to personalize the salutation if the name of the manager is available.
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Consider adding a brief closing statement expressing enthusiasm for an interview opportunity.
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The letter maintains a clear and respectful tone throughout, suitable for a job application.
coherence cohesion
The ideas are logically structured and each paragraph addresses a specific point, making it easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
Excellent use of a formal greeting and closing, enhancing the professionalism of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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