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Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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Human beings are living in an exceptional era where they could study, work, and meet remotely. Many employees are doing their job from house, and youngsters are starting to attending their classes from home
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 is due to the technological advancement. I strongly agree that
technology
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 has made these activities more convenient and productive. There are various reasons why I believe that many
people
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 had benefited from
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 sort of invention.
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, adults and students agreed that these tools have made work and education more convenient that
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 can
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 their meetings and
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 an assignment virtually.
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, a businessman, a student, and a tutor
needs
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 only a WiFi connection to
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perform
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preform
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 their job, task, and business’s deal.
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, all
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humanity had witnessed the consequences of
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the COVID-19
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 pandemic that studying on campus was merely impossible, and because of the
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 many students could
attended
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 their courses easily.
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, many enterprises had
impacted
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 negatively because of that virus;
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,
technology
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 has
lessen
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that
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severeity
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severity
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 it was not
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 accessibility of the internet, many
people
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 could lose their jobs, source of
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, and assets. Another reason why
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 is bliss is
because
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 it made
people
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’s lives more productively. These tools have been increasing
people
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’s efficiency in many ways.
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, now
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 can have more
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, and
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 is because an individual can organize their
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. Many
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 are planning
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their holiday, preparing for their presentation, and meeting with their teachers online.
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,
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 do not need to go to a travel agent to book their hotels, tickets, and even sea trips.
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, many individuals prefer to book
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their trip through a famous website called Booking.
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,
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,
a
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gigantic numbers of households have more
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because
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this sort
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 of advancements. The main reason for
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 is that
people
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 are performing their tasks
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shorter
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 period of
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. In conclusion, many
matures
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 are working from their villa and minors have studying virtually due to
technology
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, and I completed agree that these inventions have made life much easier and
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.
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 is because
people
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 can perform their everyday life from their room as well as
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 them more
time
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 due to productivity.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • work-life balance
  • environmental impact
  • socio-economic background
  • face-to-face interaction
  • interpersonal skills
  • productivity
  • reliable technology
  • quality of education
  • flexible schedule
  • cost savings
  • commuting
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