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Some people say that we do not need printed newspaper any more. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In
this
 modern world,
to get
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 up-to-date information and
news
 is pivotal as every minute something good or bad happens. Actually, there
many
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are many
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 ways to broadcast the
news
such
 as TV or radio but the
newspaper
 was the main source of information for many years.
However
, due to the
internet
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 the demand for
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a newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 or any printed sources of
news
 is decreasing and becoming old-fashioned.
Thus
, there are some opinions that printing and circulating the
newspaper
 should be stopped. Personally, I agree with the previously mentioned statement to some extent,
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will be discussed in
this
 essay. Even though
newspaper
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 is out of date version of
press
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 it has many readers among the older generation as they got used to it and it became
as
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 habitual ritual since their childhood.
Moreover
, many people prefer it because they have sensory memory. The opportunities offered by
newspaper
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newspapers
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such
 as highlighting a particular article or even holding the pages to mark where it was read the
last
 time are undeniable.
However
, the harms that might be caused to the environment while producing papers
are outweigh
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 the pros.
On the contrary
,
the
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they
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 are myriad drawbacks of reading the traditional source of
news
.
Firstly
, in order to produce the
paper
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 it is required a lot of energy and material. As we all know that the main reason
of
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for
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 deforestation is namely manufacturing
the
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papers by woods.
Consequently
, cutting down trees leads to environmental issues
such
 as global warming and carbon dioxide
omissions
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.
Secondly
, it is impossible to remake or change any misprinted or wrong article which is the main disadvantage in comparison to online
news
.
As a result
, many big
news
 organizations are constantly switching to online circulation
such
 as The New York Times or The Guardian. Spontaneously, the fact that
newspaper
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newspapers
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 include the daily
news
 but when some urgent or hot
news
occur
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 it will be printed out the
next
 day which is
also
 one drawback. To conclude, reading
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a newspaper
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 comes with many pros and cons. On the whole, print media might not be as convenient as online but it still has some readers.
However
, the environmental issues and late release of
news
 cannot be ignored. In my opinion, switching to
online
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 step by step
the
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print version of
news
 might be the optimal decision and create more capabilities for both readers and publishers.
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