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Many supermarkets are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food taht is locally sourced. What are the reasons for this? I sthis a positive or Negative developement

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In
this
 modern scenario,the number of stores ruminates that profit can get easily by vending numerous commodities that are brought from other
nations
 rather than
vending
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that is
 sectionally obtained.according to me,
this
 is a negative impact on the public.
this
 essay would analyse a few causes of
this
 phenomenon and explain with my subject view. To embark on,there are
plethora
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 of reasons why
this
 is a wrong approach avenue.
firstly
,by importing things from another region.
consequently
,it will impacts
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the country's economy as well as decreases
a
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 status of
nations
.
secondly
,by bringing objects from other regions,
then
 expenditures can be inclined in terms of exporting costs and labour salary for lifting the weights.
moreover
,it is not easy to get
products
 from other
nations
 because it
indulge
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 with
hardwork
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hard work
 to acquire more profit.
furthermore
,
although
this
phenomena
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 is
a
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pessimistic,there are
also
 some benefits.the main advantage is that cost-efficient.
for instance
,many
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businessmen
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business men
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businessmen
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 follow
this
 statement because they can get articles at a lower price from other countries,but they will sell
products
 at a higher price to their consumers. On another hand,these days,many multitudes tend to purchase many items
such
 as clothes, shoes and electronic gizmos from other
nations
,
therefore
 many supermarkets are vending other country
products
 to their customers
as
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products
 that are made from
a
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good quality material.
as a result
,they can be long lasting as well as they do not require repair. these
products
 not only
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with
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high quality
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 material but
also
 durability.
for example
,many people try to recieve branded items from people who are residing in
the
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foreign countries like the US and the
uk
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UK
Uk
. To conclude,in spite,
this
 phenomenon has a negative
impacts
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also
 it has some advantages,
therefore
 In my perspective,the quality of
material
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 is very imperative rather than
place
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 of the location.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • importation
  • locally sourced
  • globalized supply chains
  • consumer demand
  • off-season availability
  • competitive disadvantages
  • economic benefits
  • cultural exposure
  • carbon footprint
  • culinary diversity
  • sustainability
  • preservatives
  • stringent quality controls
  • seasonal produce
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