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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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It is not a secret to anybody that there are still millions of
people
 in the world who suffer from hunger, despite the fact that there has been a great improvement and development in agriculture. There are many reasons for worldwide famine and there are some measures that
people
 can take to solve
this
 global problem, which I will discuss in
this
 essay. One of the main reasons for worldwide starvation and why
people
 lack food supplies is the unequal distribution of resources. As we all know,
mostly
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people
 from undeveloped or lower class
countries
 suffer from hunger. The main reason for
that is
 an undeveloped government and a great number of unemployed citizens. Another significant reason for
famine
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the famine
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 is climate change - global warming, increase in climate temperatures, or natural climate disasters,
such
 as tornadoes, floods or, vice versa, the lack of water.
However
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 there are many solutions to overcome these obstacles.
First
 of all, more developed
countries
 can aid poor or underdeveloped
countries
 with financial support to decrease the rising amount of famine.
Secondly
, agrispecialists can plant special seeds and plants which can stand against natural disasters.
Furthermore
, to reduce the number of unemployed
people
, governments of underdeveloped
countries
 should focus on growing their
economy
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.
As a result
, there will be
improvement
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an improvement
the improvement
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 in the financial status of the country. In conclusion, there are a great number of
people
 who experience having nothing to eat in a day.
Nevertheless
,
this
 problem can be overcome by the solutions that I pointed out in
this
 essay.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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