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benedicta: Question : Some people believe that Is best to accept a bad situation such as, unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people's beliefs are bad situations should be accepted
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 as lack of money and job issues, but others suppose it is better to totry provide solutions for
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 situations. I totally agree with the
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 group, those who try to accept the position. On the one hand ,
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 accepting bad occasions in life lead to
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 mental pressure but by continuing , the time has become less stressor. On the other ,way if you accept at the
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 stage, your mind becomes free to figure out the best solution for the bad situation.
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, if you have an unsatisfaction with what are you doing for a living, at the
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 step, if you accept it,
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 your mind tries to find out the better job for you.
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, some people believe trying to improve their hard position, it is definitely lead to less effort despite more stressors.
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, in
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 way they can have a massive thrive in their life due to learning how to get along with tough occasions.
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, they can acknowledge their qualify,ability and knowledge to others,
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 can have a great influence on their confidence. So in
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 ,ways they try to improve
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 a situation. In conclusion, in spite of the whole great reason for making an effort to improve bad occasions, in my point of view, it is better to be accepted than try to figure out a better position.
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