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Education is the single most important factor for a developing country. Do you agree or disagree

#education #factor #country
Nowadays, Some people assume that schooling has solely profound importance
to improve
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 an expanding nation. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement and I will support my belief with instances. On the one hand, Literacy improves a working person's capability. We can take Computer skills as an example, Nowadays it is impossible to lead a life towards an impressive growth trajectory without
this
 knowledge because modern life ardently depends on technology which is operated by computers.
This
 skill is manageable by those who are educated and who can skim the language of computers. One of my friends joined his job just the next day when he got his graduation result because he was skilled in computers since his university life.
On the other hand
, Health is more important than education because an unhealthy community is a curse for a nation.
For example
, If we look out in some Indian states where famine is a daily event
as well as
 there are 70 % of people are educated but they
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 not able to improve their conditions because of their health issues. As they don't get enough food for a living they are not eligible to do work that would be beneficial for their nations
as well as
 them.
Moreover
, To become an asset of nations individuals need to be physically capable first
then
 they can
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 tremendous contributions to promote the society. In conclusion, No doubt tuition keeps a significant tribute
enhancing
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 a developing world but In my opinion, I believe that skilled people,
healthy
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 community,
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economical
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 factor
also
 important for developing a country.
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