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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It it been said that every good things comes with a price. In
this
 contemporary era, technological development happening at a rappid pace.
This
 leap of advancement is affecting the bonding of the
people
 in our society. In
this
 essay, I will compaire the use of
technology
 and how it impacts our society,
moreover
 I will
also
 include few examples to give my balanced opinion. On one hand, with the use of
technology
people
 came more close to each other. Dispite of the many barrier like, distance and time-zones, with the use of social media applications and current generation mobile devices,
people
 can connect with anyone and anytime.
For example
: I can talk to my cousin brother living in Chennai anytime with just a click of a button.
On the other hand
, I
also
 beieve that using to much of
technology
 demise personal touch.
Further
, the feeling of availability anytime makes individual so dependable on
technology
 that sometimes they forget that calling and messeging are not only options to connect.
People
 just lost physical touch.
For example
: when the mobile devices were not available, we used to arrange a gat togather with all my school frineds,
however
 now-a-days we completely stoped meeing friends and became solly dependent on social media applications. To summarise, I would suggest anyone who is using
technology
 to connect with their loved onces that they should find a balance point for the usage of these technological advancement. Balanced usage will make socity real close and overuse might make any relationship distanced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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