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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Developed
countries
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alloting
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allowing
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financial support to developing
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unimprovised
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unimproved
countries
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 but some people opine that giving money is not helpful to solve
countries
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 poverty.
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, need to provide some other beneficial
helps
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help
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 for least developed
countries
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 rather than fund support. In my
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perspective
,
i
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 believe giving
someother
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some other
 supports like education for international students, improvising
bussiness
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business
 deals or running top companies in poor
countries
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gives
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 more opportunities for youngsters. At
first
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, in most of the developing
countries
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having
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higher
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 population which
results
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 too many young degree
holdres
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holders
. For those only
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 jobs are available, lots of graduates not getting the job according to their graduate level.
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 if some of
an international companies
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international companies
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 being organised in poorer
nations
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 it will be more beneficial for young graduates, it
results
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 the growth of
nations
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 economy.
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, if Google is constructed in
india
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India
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, it will be more helpful to improve
country's
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 employment range.
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,
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 increasing the
bussiness
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business
 deals to underdeveloped
nations
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, will
boosts
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 the nation's income.
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, increasing import and export
bussiness
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business
 there is an opportunity for the people in these
countries
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 to improvise their trade growth. Especially farmers will get more benefits has been trading more agricultural products.
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, supporting to
medical
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 industry will be
huge
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 aid for higher populated democracy whereas many diseases might be unavailable in these
nations
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. To sum up, rich
countries
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 often give financial support to
underpriviliged
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underprivileged
nations
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 but it will never overcome the country's necessity.
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Furthermore
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 benefits are needed for
nations
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 growth. In my view, funding is not fair and enough for
development
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the development
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 of democracy there are some more benefits should need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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