Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Developed
countries
alloting
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allowing
a
financial support to developing Remove the article
apply
countries
or unimprovised
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unimproved
countries
but some people opine that giving money is not helpful to solve countries
poverty. Instead
, need to provide some other beneficial helps
for
least developed Change the wording
help
bits of help
countries
rather than fund support. In my perspection
, Correct your spelling
perspective
i
believe giving Change the capitalization
I
someother
supports like education for international students, improvising Correct your spelling
some other
bussiness
deals or running top companies in poor Correct your spelling
business
countries
will gives
more opportunities for youngsters.
At Change the verb form
give
first
, in most of the developing countries
having
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have
higher
population which Add an article
a higher
results
too many young degree Add the preposition
inresults
fromresults
holdres
. For those only Correct your spelling
holders
less
jobs are available, lots of graduates not getting the job according to their graduate level.Change the quantifier
fewer
Therefore
if some of an international companies
being organised in poorer Correct the article-noun agreement
international companies
an international company
nations
it will be more beneficial for young graduates, it results
the growth of Add the preposition
inresults
fromresults
nations
economy.For instance
, if Google is constructed in india
, it will be more helpful to improve Change the capitalization
India
country's
employment range.
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the country's
On the other hand
, although
increasing the bussiness
deals to underdeveloped Correct your spelling
business
nations
, will boosts
the nation's income. Change the verb form
boost
Furthermore
, increasing import and export bussiness
there is an opportunity for the people in these Correct your spelling
business
countries
to improvise their trade growth. Especially farmers will get more benefits has been trading more agricultural products.
However
, supporting to medical
industry will be Add an article
the medical
huge
aid for higher populated democracy whereas many diseases might be unavailable in these Add an article
a huge
nations
.
To sum up, rich countries
often give financial support to underpriviliged
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underprivileged
nations
but it will never overcome the country's necessity. Furthermore
benefits are needed for Add a comma
,Furthermore
nations
growth. In my view, funding is not fair and enough for development
of democracy there are some more benefits should need.Add an article
the development
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