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the proportion of female going into higher education in five various countries between 1980 and 2015.

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The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of females going into higher
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 in five various countries between 1980 and 2015. The general overview here is that Australia indicated the highest amount of women going into higher
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 over the period. According to the bar chart, it can be seen that in 1980, Australia experienced the majority of females going into higher
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,accounting for almost 60% which was almost one and a half more than that of South Korea’s rate. The corresponding figure for France,and the USA were approximately exactly 50% and just under 40%. The UK was lower than that,but still, its number was higher than South Korea. The latter had only 15% of the total percentage. In 2015, there was a sharp increase in the number of females going into higher
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 in four countries. There was a dramatic increase in the figure of the USA,accounting for almost 60%.
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, the number of the UK and South Korea rose significantly to around 55% and exactly 30% respectively.
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, there was stability in the figure of Australia.
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