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With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250.

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Owing to the advancement in
health
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care
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 facilities
people
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's
life
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 expectancy has increased and fewer
people
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 die due to severe medical conditions. In my
opinion
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 development will continue in the
future
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 as well and
hence
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 young
people
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 in the society will not face much difficulty in taking
care
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 of the elderly in their homes.
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 of all the development
in
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 medicines is helping in curing the ailments that were incurable in the past and which were the reasons for the loss of many lives. Nowadays, because of the betterment in
medical
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 field old
people
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 in almost all the countries of the world are leading a better
life
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. As per the data furnished by a newspaper
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 week,
health
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 risks amongst old
people
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 are prevented a great deal with the help medicines and advanced treatments available.
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 I believe that the efficient medical facilities available to the old
people
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 will help them in having a satisfactory
life
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 in the
future
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.
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, with the help of the internet, aged
people
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 have access to several safety precautions too that they can take to prevent themselves from having any diseases. With the
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help of the internet
people
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 in their early forties have started eating the right food and doing exercises as well. As they now know that not just medicines but eating right and having some physical activities are required too to have a healthy
life
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. So, due to the awareness among old ones regarding the precautions to be taken to stay healthy, I think that they will not face
many
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any
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health
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 problems in the
future
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 and
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 would not have to be looked after much by the young
people
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 in their family. As improvements are being seen in medical science almost every year, the tending of
elderly
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the elderly
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 would not be that big an issue in the
future
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. And they could be looked after quite efficiently in the coming times because of the better facilities that will be made available to them in the
future
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. In conclusion, advanced technology is helping us in taking
care
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 of the elders and I believe it would continue to do so in the
future
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 as well. Along with
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 old
people
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 are
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 aware of the things they should be doing to take
care
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 of their
health
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. So, I think society will not face many difficulties in taking
care
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 of the elderly.
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