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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

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Nowadays it become common for
students
 to attain colleges in
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 countries than the native one.
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 youngsters the opportunity to learn new languages and meet new cultures represent just a few of the benefits. In
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons why is for young
people
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 opportunity to face
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other realities. Living and studying abroad allows
people
 to practice and learn new
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languages
 and, even teach an important life lesson.
Firstly
 attending courses or classes in foreign countries is the
first
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students
 to
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speak
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, many youngsters finish their studies abroad where they certainly will be in contact with local culture, and the communication by local language will be compulsory. For young
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 the commitment behind the house rent represents the way to learn the difficulty to live alone.
Students
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life far from
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their
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 they will need to learn how to cook, where
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 the bills, or even more the better way to
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 money.
On the other hand
, for young
people
, can be difficult and
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stressful the integrations in a new
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reality and
 the economic maintenance of the hose. Living in a new country could struggle
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 relationships. For shy
students
 could be not easy to find
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 group where they can be comfortable
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, and
this
 may lead to struggle, and the
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academic
 path could
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.
In addition
, house costs are difficult to sustain. Many
students
, could be encouraged to leave their studies because they can not afford the house. In conclusion, I strongly believe that to study in foreign countries develop certain skills that
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 alone overseas are possible, but, overall the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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