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Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society

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Nowadays, most of the
students
 prefer attending other university's courses to studying scientific
majors
. Whereas it could be simple at the
first
 sight, it is rooted in numerous reasons,
such
 as the difficulty of these
subjects
 and the tuition fees. I assume that it would have terrible effects on the community. There are at least two significant reasons why fewer
students
 are motivated to study science-related
subjects
 in universities, and most of them show reluctance to it.
To begin
 with, These
majors
 are considered the hardest
majors
, and
also
 required more attempts than the other courses.
For instance
, in comparison with non-scientific ones, they include more lessons to be memorised and
this
 problem is the roof of indifference to these
majors
. Thereby, just elite
students
 maybe enrol for studying science
subjects
.
Furthermore
, not only these
majors
 are not cheap, but
also
 the exorbitant tuition cost of these courses is not affordable even for a middle-class family. as an illustration, most of the families do not consent their children to study scientific
majors
 due to the fact that after paying the tuition, they will be confronted with an immense financial issue.
Thus
, dozens of
students
 are deprived of studying these
subjects
. Both financial problems and the difficulty of these
majors
 contribute society to facing countless issues. The most important problem would be that it probably has a terrible influence on factories and institutes due to the lack of skilled men. I assume that these factories may use foreign
people
 to compensate for
this
 scarcity. So, the rate of unemployment will increase dramatically in these communities, and it will put extra pressure on many states, especially the welfare state and public insurance. In conclusion,
although
 it is essential for a society to have science-educated
people
 to use them in jobs, which need professionals and sophisticated
people
, many communities have been gripped by the lack of these kinds of
people
. I think there are many measures to be taken to tackle
this
 issue,
such
 as public and free education.
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