Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

💫: People have different views about whether
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historic object which is related to a
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culture should be kept in their
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in another region where can keep it in a better situation. while it is a right
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that people in a society should have their own cultural
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. I strongly agree with
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that if these kinds of
things
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right way in their own
country
, they should relocate them to another place or
country
where can protect them. Some people have a notion about keeping their historical
things
which they carry some cultural meanings should be in their region,
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that's
a possible
idea
if they can keep them safe in a good situation and can protect them from the
destoration
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restoration
decoration
during the time but many of them can not do
this
and
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destroy them completely
completly
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completely
or make some
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unchangeable
damage on them. They are some live examples of
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On the other hand
, there is another
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which I believe
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can be the most
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idea
is that to keep
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things
in the best place. If they were transferred to
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in museums and protect
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in the best ways and their original
country
does not have the condition to keep them safe after
this
time, we must not move them to their own
country
because if they harm them in any way they can not replace them is not replace them with anything else. In conclusion,
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on my knowledge we must pay attention to
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our history and
everythings
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everything
is anything which they relate to it. Because they shape our present-day culture and we should keep them safe in anywhere,
wheter
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whether
in their original origin or in a better place.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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