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Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life. Others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Some parts of the community think that
experiences
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 that were gained as a schoolchild will be more vital than
experiences
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 they gained as
preschoolers
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 for their
future
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life
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.
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, school-age
youngsters
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 will retain more in their
memory
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 than
preschoolers
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. At the same , they will start to argue on facts with themself as
youngsters
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 than small
children
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. Since
then
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 , I strongly think
experiences
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 gained as
youngsters
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 will affect the
future
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 more than the
experiences
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 gained as
preschoolers
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 .
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 with , when we consider
preschoolers
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 they are in a very immature stage of
life
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 . They only like to play and have a very limited capacity for
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. Unfortunately , most of the
experiences
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 they gain will be lost with time and they will need to acquire new
life
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experiences
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 in the
future
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 .
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 , a study done by the University of Toronto has found , small
children
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 will remain only 3-5% of their childhood
memory
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 as adults,
On the other hand
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, Young
children
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 have the essential thinking ability to understand things .
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 , they will argue with themself on factors that they see and heard and will retain their
memory
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 for long times .
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 , a survey done by scientists at the University of Colombo has found out , most university students gain their
life
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experiences
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 at school age than very young age . In conclusion , some people think,
experiences
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 that are gained at a very young age will be more valuable as adults than
experiences
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 that gained as young school
children
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 .
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, most of the
experiences
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 that small
children
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 have, will tend to forget and
on the other hand
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 , as young
children
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 they have the ability to argue on facts . Since
then
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 ,
this
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 writer opines, on the fact that the
experiences
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 that gain as
youngsters
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 will be more important for their
future
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 .
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