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Band 3.5

Summerise the information and selecting and reporting

The
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 graphs describe information about the world populace of urban, rural and total,
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the
age
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 structure of three
age
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 groups under 15, 15-65 and over 65 respectively in ten decades between 1950 and 2040. Overall,
urban
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the urban
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population
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 has been raising from the given initial
period
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 to
end
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 of the year while the medium
age
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 group mankind has the majority as compared
others
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. According to the world
population
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,
in
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the urban's populace had just 8% in the starting
period
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then
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this
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 ratio was increased significantly and reached the peak
in
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 the end of the
period
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, with an average of 38 per cent.
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, the rural had just 4% in 1950 and there was a slight increase in 1970, which is 5%. From 1970 to 2040,
rural
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the rural
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population
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 has been maintained
the
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 same level.
Total
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population
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 has been increasing from the initial
period
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 to
end
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 of the years, from 11% to 42% respectively. In
term
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 of
teh
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the
age
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 structure, in 1950,
15
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the 15
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-65
age
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 group had 6%
then
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 there was fluctuated from 1960 to 2020, after that,
this
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 ratio will be reached 35% in 2040. Under 15 and over 65, these both were had the equal amount in the initial
period
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, which is 3%, but over 65 was reduced by 1% in the
next
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 decade, surprisingly, under 15
age
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 group had increased by 2%. These both were maintained
the
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 stable plateau until 2040, which is 5%.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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