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Some people think that when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others consider they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions.

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Nowadays when there is a lot of talent available in the market, some companies want to hire
people
 who are creative and innovative as well as can
work
 on their own. On the other side, some organisations recruit
people
 who are
team
 players and take suggestions and obey the instructions of their peers. Here I am going to discuss both the views and their pros and cons.
Firstly
, In the world of fastest-growing technologies, some companies require
people
 who can
work
 independently without anyone's support. If that
person
 is innovative too, he or she can contribute more to the development of that
company
.
Also
, Companies have to spend less money if resources are less. It will be beneficial to an organisation as well as a
person
 as an individual. As we know every coin has two sides; if there is no senior available, that
person
 becomes overconfident sometimes and can take wrong decisions as well which may impact an organisation negatively.
However
, If the
company
 looks for employees, who are
team
 players and can seamlessly do their tasks within a
team
;
then
 it is helpful to both of them as resources can divide their responsibilities and if one
person
 is not available other
people
 can take up his or her tasks. In
this
 way,
work
 will not be impacted. If a
company
 hire
people
 who are obedient and take suggestion from their leads, they can be on the same page and there should not be any conflicts. But as I said earlier, organisations have to hire more
people
 in terms of making a good
team
. So eventually the
company
 has to pay more to resources. To sum up, I believe that organisations should hire an employee who is not only talented but
also
 can
work
 independently as well as in a
team
. An employee should be less egoistic and should always take suggestions from their seniors if they will have stuck in any difficult situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovative
  • independent
  • creative
  • problem-solving skills
  • development
  • new ideas
  • solutions
  • productivity
  • competitiveness
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • consistency
  • adherence
  • policies
  • conflicts
  • efficiency
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