Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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consider that the best
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to talk to
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about the dangers of committing a
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who have been in prison become good citizens later. In my opinion,I have much sympathy with
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view,for several reasons addressed below. In the
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place,during the growing up of some children,because of the rebellious psychology of adolescence,some children are likely to think that some crimes are cool,and they even want to imitate. At
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point, if
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who have been in prison tell them that
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is not cool at all,told
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about their criminal experiences,and tell
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that they have been punished for committing crimes,they regret their past
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may be discouraged from wanting to commit a
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. Unlike others, their experiences are authentic,so it's more persuasive. In the
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place,to be honest,there are many other ways to dissuade
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from committing crimes,but none of them is the best way.
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, in school, teachers ask students not to commit crimes. Most students just listen, but they don't care. Because in the eyes of the students, the teacher's persuasion is not persuasive. Just like the teacher tell them that they should study hard,they don't care and they even go against the teacher. In summary,the best
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to talk to
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about the dangers of committing a
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are
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who have been in prison become good citizens later.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prisoners
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • consequences
  • insights
  • deterrent
  • guidance
  • support
  • role models
  • positive change
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