In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of these views? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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which can lead to depression and 2. help in self-development from
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since during 4-7 is the
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their
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lives. Some people
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commence their formal
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at four
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's systems. From my point of view, my stand is that I agree with the former view and the reason to support my opinion will be discussed in the following
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that
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and capable of taking care of themselves so it is more likely
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parents, sending out their kids to
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, who is incompetent to adapt himself
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new circumstances,
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miserable
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, one of the kids from my town, was sent to boarding
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when he was five
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difficulty in talking with strangers. From there on, he becomes
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introverted child and rarely speaks with other
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. It is suggested that students in
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of four or five
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of learning. Entering
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from
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and
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enviroment
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prosperity in higher
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the same
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, interpersonal skills and communicating skills are earned,
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can build their social networking while can
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childhood memories with friends. In conclusion, it depends on
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situation and what is the foremost way for each child. It is important for
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to enter
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school
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when they are ready.
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a wide range of advantages of applying for
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at the
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of four or fives
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can be learned in the appropriate
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environment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • formal education
  • advisable
  • structured learning
  • academic skills
  • socialization
  • competitive edge
  • cognitive development
  • language acquisition
  • play-based learning
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • cognitive abilities
  • reduce stress
  • childhood
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