These days in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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In
this
modern scenario,the role of
educator
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has become very popular because
teacher
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the teacher
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who is the only one has
a
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capacity to guide children's with patience,
therefore
many individuals have set a goal to become
instructor
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especially in high schools.
this
essay would analyse a few reasons for
this
phenomenon and suggests some ways to resolve the problem. To embark on,there are some grounds why many individuals are interested
to
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glue the job of
tutor
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a tutor
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.
first
and foremost,it involves with a profound salary compared to other occupations as well as it offers pensions after retirement.
consequently
they will lead a happy entity even though at an old
age
.
secondly
,the most imperative factor is that many multitudes have a desire to teach students with their depth subject knowledge.
as a result
,scholars can be settled easily at
their
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young
age
.
furthermore
,
instructor
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the instructor
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is the only one place where
people
are greatly respected by all kinds of individuals regardless of
age
disparities.
for example
,my friend who got a post at an early of her
age
.
although
her generation is very low,she is respected by all the
people
. On another hand,several remedial measures can be taken in order to solve the problem.
initially
,multitudes should be encouraged to do other posts
such
as a doctor and engineering,but
this
is only happened
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when the government
increased
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payments for all the fields.
furthermore
,the authorities try to ameliorate other posts by reducing the posts of teachers.
for example
,if the government take a decision to lessen the occupations of teachers,it will
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many
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people
are
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interested to get another occupation. To conclude,
teaching
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profession is a very good activity because they have a chance to improve the qualities of their students with their hands,so
this
is the one reason 
people
are encouraged to become
tutor
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tutors
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,but the government should be provided other jobs for all
people
.
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