Teenage offenders should be treated in the same way as adult criminals. Do you agree?

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Doing
crime
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of any
kind
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is very bad for
society
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. I do not believe that teenage offenders should be treated in the same way as
adults
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because sometimes
teenagers
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do
crimes
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without being aware that they are doing a
crime
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. Most of the
crimes
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that are committed by
teenagers
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are generally
crimes
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of anger and hate.
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kind
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of aggression and hatred comes from the environment that they are living in. Generally teenage is a very important stage in everyone's life committing any
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of
crime
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during
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period is very horrible and can have drastic and unexpected consequences. I
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noticed that
teenagers
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and children are used by
adults
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as accessories to commit
crimes
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. Many
adults
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are brainwashing
teenagers
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and involving them in
crimes
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and sometimes
teenagers
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do not even know what they are doing until a
crime
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is done.If
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kinds kind
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a teenager
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is treated like
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then
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is not good for
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as a whole because
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might make the teenager who has committed a
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hate
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even more. I firmly believe that people always need a
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chance to restart their lives, and my opinion might not be true in the case of gruesome
crimes
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committed by anyone.But
teenagers
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should be given a
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chance and their mental state should be evaluated by well-trained psychologists before giving them any
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of punishment. If the
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committed by a teenager is unintentional I consider educating them properly and making them realize is the best way to move forward as a
society
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. Teenage
crime
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can be reduced by properly educating them in schools,colleges and universities. Parents should
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provide a good environment for their children especially
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and should observe them so that fall into bad traps.
Crimes
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in any
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will reflect its failures as a whole.Educating our
teenagers
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about these
crimes
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and making them empathize with the victims of
crime
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will reduce many
crimes
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. I think everyone in a
society
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should have that collective responsibility and should correct our
teenagers
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when they mistake because these
teenagers
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will be
adults
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tomorrow in the world. Educating our
teenagers
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about the horrors of
crime
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in the world in a proper way will make the world a better place for tomorrow.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • juvenile
  • rehabilitation
  • impulse control
  • recidivism
  • incarceration
  • brain development
  • psychological effects
  • social implications
  • severity
  • criminal justice system
  • ethical considerations
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