Teenage offenders should be treated in the same way as adult criminals. Do you agree?

Doing
crime
of any
kind
is very bad for
society
. I do not believe that teenage offenders should be treated in the same way as
adults
because sometimes
teenagers
do
crimes
without being aware that they are doing a
crime
. Most of the
crimes
that are committed by
teenagers
are generally
crimes
of anger and hate.
This
kind
of aggression and hatred comes from the environment that they are living in. Generally teenage is a very important stage in everyone's life committing any
kind
of
crime
during
this
period is very horrible and can have drastic and unexpected consequences. I
also
noticed that
teenagers
and children are used by
adults
as accessories to commit
crimes
. Many
adults
are brainwashing
teenagers
and involving them in
crimes
and sometimes
teenagers
do not even know what they are doing until a
crime
is done.If
these
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is treated like
adults
then
this
is not good for
society
as a whole because
this
might make the teenager who has committed a
crime
hate
society
even more. I firmly believe that people always need a
second
chance to restart their lives, and my opinion might not be true in the case of gruesome
crimes
committed by anyone.But
teenagers
should be given a
second
chance and their mental state should be evaluated by well-trained psychologists before giving them any
kind
of punishment. If the
crime
committed by a teenager is unintentional I consider educating them properly and making them realize is the best way to move forward as a
society
. Teenage
crime
can be reduced by properly educating them in schools,colleges and universities. Parents should
also
provide a good environment for their children especially
teenagers
and should observe them so that fall into bad traps.
Crimes
in any
society
will reflect its failures as a whole.Educating our
teenagers
about these
crimes
and making them empathize with the victims of
crime
will reduce many
crimes
. I think everyone in a
society
should have that collective responsibility and should correct our
teenagers
when they mistake because these
teenagers
will be
adults
tomorrow in the world. Educating our
teenagers
about the horrors of
crime
in the world in a proper way will make the world a better place for tomorrow.
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