Governments in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on foods and beverages with high levels of sugar. Some think these taxes are a good idea while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Sugar
, it's one of the highest consumed
products
, it's not only used for homemade purposes but
also
to manufacture a variety of foods and beverages. The
levels
of
sugar
consumed are alarming and recently, governments in many countries have imposed special
taxes
on foods and beverages with high
levels
of
sugar
. People have
a
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different
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towards the special
taxes
, few are satisfied by the step as it may reduce the alarming consumption of
sugar
,
while
others dislike the imposition of
taxes
as it'll cost them higher than usual.
First,
Sugar
has a lot of unhealthy features and is known for its contribution to obesity, diabetes, and many more health issues. The imposition of special
taxes
might turn out bad for the foods and beverages manufacturing
companies
,
therefore
, they may focus
to reduce
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sugar
levels
in their
products
by enhancing the research and development sector of their company,
This
will result in
products
with lower
levels
of
sugar
, making them healthy and tasty at the same time.
This
could be the reason behind people supporting
such
initiatives by the government.
Second,
companies
cannot always find a perfect replacement for
sugar
,
therefore
they cannot reduce the
sugar
level in their product,
this
will lead to the implementation of special
taxes
, which will indeed increase the pricing of the product.
This
change might not be favourable to either,
companies
or consumers. It's a reasonable point to not support the special
taxes
. In conclusion, the latest implementations by the government have their own merits and demerits, in my opinion, the government should reformulate the law in
such
a direction, that it restricts
companies
to use
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a high level of
sugar
and
maintain
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the pricing of the product,
such
a step would make
products
healthier and affordable at the same time, both,
companies
and consumers stay satisfied.
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task response
Address the opposing views more explicitly and provide a deeper analysis of the advantages and disadvantages of the sugar taxes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • processed foods
  • punitive measures
  • revenue
  • public health campaigns
  • awareness
  • government overreach
  • personal freedoms
  • unhealthy diets
  • economic burden
  • sugar-related health issues
  • consumer behavior
  • taxation
  • high levels of sugar
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