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The growth of online shopping will one day leads to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Digital marketing is escalating day by day and it will ultimately, result in the shutting down of the shops which are in urban and rural regions. I disagree with
this
 statement. In
this
 essay, I will shed light on some reasons related to my opinion. There are myriad reasons why online shopping can replace offline shopping.
Firstly
, in window shopping chances of dodging a customer is very less and everyone can buy items after checking the quality of items and can pay after complete satisfaction.
For instance
, nowadays, there are many online websites that totally deceive buyers. They are selling worse kinds of things,
such
 as fabrics, toys or any kind of edibles. They show it in their advertisement very nicely and in a tricky way like focusing lights on that item it glows and people are impressed. To illustrate, they show fabric quality and colour to attract as many people as they can,
however
, it is not the same in real.
Similarly
, they show household machines functioning very efficiently which is invariably false.
Secondly
, window shopping is a very good way to entertain ourselves. Owing to a busy routine, everyone wants to go out and spend a good time.
For example
, the majority of women in our country Pakistan go to shops in groups with their family and friends and enjoy themselves a lot. After having discussed the pertinent points related to the subject, it can be inferred that online shopping cannot close the shops in cities and towns because offline shopping has its own benefits which one can not get by electronic shopping.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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