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International tourism has become a huge industry in the world.Do the problems of international travel outweigh its advantages.

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Nowadays, international
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 has brought a great number of merits for the nations of tourist attractive cities.
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, it has to be mentioned that there are
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 problems too, which have to be overcome by both governments and society.
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 essay will explain some of these difficulties which have been created by the
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 and, it will give some reasons why it is still worth investing in
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. The
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 may have some impacts on both historical sites and the natural environment of host cities. Many travellers do not pay enough attention to keep the remainings of historical structures untouched and intact. There are many of them who draw some notes on these priceless objects and do not care about their importance. So, the more tourists visit a specific site, the more chance of destruction is expected.
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, there may be a lack of environmental preservation knowledge in some people.
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, they may commit some actions which lead to permanent effects on the nature of the host city.
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, they may make a fire in protected sites without knowing its sequences and it ends in huge destruction of a forest.
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, since these outcomes may be lessened significantly if some cautions are taken, societies can make a great profit from
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 industries. international travellers bring lots of currency with them and they are going to spend it in their destination. Eventually, the total amount of money in a specific country may rise dramatically.
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industry
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 can provide an opportunity for nations to introduce their culture including traditional food, traditional clothing and etc to other people all over the world. As a consequence, a sense of nationalism may appear in a positive way which can help
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a nation to make their country and their culture great and lively. In conclusion, the
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 may burden difficulties on a country, can improve the wealth and pride of that nation. Both governments and people have to choose a correct pathway in management of them to gain the most from
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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