Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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argue that the
music
is one way through people from other culture and
diffrent
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different
ages can come together. I believe,
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notion is beneficial as
music
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any language.
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music
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a considerable potential to express
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feelings which are hard to say through
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words. Where lack of
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knowledge
of that
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particular
language can have limitations, the composition of songs with
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words from
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different
langauages
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languages
can teach citizens about that as well as other
langauages
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languages
.
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, the famous Korean pop stars
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also
have
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amount of fan followers in India as well, and the love for that
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particular
tone motivates them to learn more about Korea.
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free time, parents and
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children
childrens
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children
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like to listen to
music
as it helps them to relax. Pupils of
young
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age are thought numbers and an alphabet through a song by their guardians which they sing for them,
this
creates an attachment between them.
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on various social media platforms are done by people of all ages
thus
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is brought by the
music
can be seen. Considering these, with support of
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examples I agree that
music
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, not only family members of all ages come together but
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foreign cultures and languages can
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural diversity
  • harmony
  • integration
  • bridging gaps
  • foster
  • ignite
  • embrace
  • communicate
  • celebrate
  • appreciate
  • inclusivity
  • universal language
  • emotional resonance
  • shared experiences
  • intercultural dialogue
  • intergenerational connections
  • cultural exchange
  • catalyst
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