Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, thank them for the photos and the holiday explain why you didn't write earlier invite them to come and stay with you

Dear Adam, I hope

this

letter finds you in good health and best of spirits. I want to thank you for inviting me to join you during the summer vacation. I really enjoyed our Vancouver trip. I guess it was the best ever voyage that I had in my life and the photos that we collected are

also

fabulous. I appreciate that you have posted me all the pictures and memories that we collected. I even wanted to write to you earlier unfortunately, I got stuck in my office work as you know well

that

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I am bad at managing my time.

Moreover

, my mother was sick and was hospitalized for 5 days.

Hence

, I had to travel back to Toronto from Collingwood every day to take proper care of her. I would like to extend you the invitation for the winter break in my town Blue Mountains, Ontario.

This

also

a very adorable place and we can go skiing during vacations and you can stay with me and enjoy the homemade food from my mother as she cooks delicious meals. I will be waiting to

catch-up

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with you in winter. Yours sincerely, Navneet Kaur.

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Consider providing more specific details about the moments you enjoyed during your trip to make your gratitude more personal.

coherence cohesion

Ensure smoother transitions between reasons for not writing earlier to make the letter flow more naturally.

coherence cohesion

You have effectively structured the letter with clear paragraphs focusing on different ideas.

task achievement

The tone of your letter is warm and appropriate for the context.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

196 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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