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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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Motivation letter My desire to get
education
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 in
Canada
 is based on several things that are very important to me.
First
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of
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if
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of
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 all,
Canada
 is an amazing and interesting place
which
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that
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 provides the best opportunities for higher
education
 studies because
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education
 in
Canada
 is considered
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one of the best in the world. There are plenty of well-known and prestigious universities and colleges and one of them is
Humber
College
.
Humber
College
 Institute of Technology and Advanced
Leraning
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Learning
 is appealing to me due to its prestige,
high class
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education
 and tolerance to national diversity among students.
Humber
College
 provides a great opportunity to delve into the essential aspects of
business
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the business
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 including marketing, e-
commrce
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commerce
, accounting,
business
 writing and communications.
Moreover
,
Humber
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the Humber
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Business
Managament
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Management
 program gives not only theoretical knowledge but
also
 practical experience like working in
team
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a team
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.
College
 offers modern
facillities
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facilities
 like cutting-edge technology which makes
study
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 process more interesting and productive.
Moreover
,
Canada
 provides
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opportunity
opportuinity
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an opportuinity
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 to make
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a connection
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connection
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 and communicate with people from different countries which helps to broaden horizons and discover new
neccessary
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necessary
 knowledge about culture, history and other interesting information about different nations. As for my background, it has
also
 helped me to set goals of getting
education
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an education
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 in
Canada
. I have been learning English since
first
 grade. Since five grade I
relized
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realized
 that English will help me a lot in my future career so I have started to give more attention to
this
 language.
Moreover
, I have started to familiarize
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culture
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the culture
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 of English-speaking countries and
this
 is when I got fascinated by
Canada
, its wonderful nature,
national
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a national
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 diversity and high level of security. Studying Social Studies and Economics in school gave me a general idea of
such
 aspects of
business
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the business
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 as negotiation,
business
 law and
problem solving
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problem-solving
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.
This
 background knowledge
also
 has inspired me to study in
Canada
.
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