Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos,while others think that zoos are both entertaining and logically important. Discuss both views.

#people #animals #zoos

In these

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days,notions of keeping

animals

in zoos are varied from each other.Most people think that caging

animals

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is better than releasing them to

the

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nature.In

this

essay,I will discuss

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issue according to environmental,personal and economic views. According to some people,keeping

animals

in cages will protect them from being prey for predators.

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this

way,we can sustain their food availability.

Nevertheless

,keeping

animals

free is more logical than isolating them from their species.If we save them in a cage all the time,they would not be able to live in

fresh

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air and chase after

animals

In other words

,we prevent them to experience

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a normal

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life.

Although

keeping

animals

in cages is cruel,it comes with several benefits.

Substantial

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amount of profits can be made by keeping these

animals

.In a per day, a wide range of people come to zoos to see these

animals

.Obviously,

this

brings a lot of money to the government. As far as I am concerned,keeping

animals

in cages is not fair.Like

humanbeings

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human beings

animals

also

have emotions and feelings.They do have

right

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to live independently like us. To conclude,keeping

animals

in zoos might have some

values

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,but it is unjustifiable to keep

animals

away from their natural habitat.They have the right to survive independently,to

fulfill

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their life till the end.

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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natural habitat
artificial enclosures
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