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In recent years, online shopping has become increasingly popular. Some people think such a shopping method is beneficial, while others believe it creates more problems than it solves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The usage of the internet has made it possible for humans to do almost all sorts of activities by using online platforms and
therefore
 the virtual medium of buying
things
 is gaining ground with
time
. Some opine and so do I that a lot of benefits are rendered due to
this
 trend while some others believe that more problems than the ones resolved are caused due to it. Both sides will be discussed with appropriate reasoning in the upcoming paragraphs.
First
, the availability of applications and websites to shop
things
 from the comfort of one's home acts as a boon as it helps in saving
time
 which
people
 do not have much these days because of their busy lifestyle. Not just
this
people
 are able to get
products
 at a cheaper rate too as applications
such
 as Amazon, Flipkart provide huge discounts on
products
 they sell.
Therefore
, the online method of purchase is advantageous a great deal for those who have a scarcity of
time
. Though buying
products
 online is helpful in saving
time
 and getting
products
 at a better rate, it has caused losses to small businesses. Since most
people
 buy
things
 online, local vendors do not have much market and
hence
 are not able to stand the competition created by digital shopping platforms. Another problem created due to
this
 is that at times goods delivered are not of great quality and services given afterwards
are
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 not that efficient too.
Therefore
, a lot of customers'
time
 is wasted in the entire process of buying and returning the
products
 bought when found to be of low quality. In conclusion,
although
 purchasing
things
 using digital platforms causes shutting down of small businesses and
also
 sometimes customers are delivered commodities of poor quality, I believe it is advantageous as it makes shopping quite convenient for
people
.
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