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very year several languages die out .some people think that is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. to what extent do you agree or dissagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, the development of technology influences the way we live.Changes in our method of shopping are one of the implications of
this
 development.These days, more and more
people
 are interested in online shopping which causes the end of the era of physical stores.I ,
however
, disagree with
this
 notion due to following reasons. One of the most important reasons should
first
 of all be mentioned here is , the lack of trust in online
shops
.Windows shopping still is the
first
 preference among many
people
, because they want to be sure of the quality of the product that they are going to buy , by
this
 kind of purchasing buyer will be able to touch what they want to buy , in the case of clothes shopper can try it on before they pay for it ,
moreover
,lot of
people
 usually like to buy the special products in person, buying gold is a good example of
this
 issue because shoppers are not sure about the authenticity of their
shops
.
In addition
 , virtual shopping can nat be practical throughout the world.In some developing countries, there are many illiterate
people
 who do not know how to use the internet or even a simple mobile phone ,African countries are another examples, where dwellers suffer from poor infrastructures, definitely using the internet is not common in
this
 regions. To conclude,the presence of the internet is very much ubiquitous
consequently
 online shopping will develop
further
 but
shops
 in towns and cities will not be closed due to a lack of trust in virtual
shops
,
on the other hand
, it is not practical everywhere.
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