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One of the consequences of improved medical care os that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, we face increasing technology in every part of human life. One of them is improving the quality of medical care. I find it as good progress for science which has a direct influence on better and healthier society and
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 it causes people to suffer a greater elderly time. In the past time, people died from many simple
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 they had got a cold
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 they died because of that. By improving the medical research, scientists have found medicine for most of these simple
diseases
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 have found for many illnesses which they had thought there is not any way to cure . In the past time, people died from many simple
diseases
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for instance
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 they had got a cold
then
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 they died because of that. By improving the medical research, scientists have found medicine for most of these simple
diseases
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 have found for many illnesses which they had thought there is not any way to cure .
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