IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between citles. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#countries #people #sums #money #railway #lines #trains #citles #transport
Nowadays, utilisation of public transport has rapidly increased. The debated view focuses on
people
 pondering that spending a large amount of money on new railway tracks should be boomed. I believe that the former view has a more favourable side. Both the aspects along with my point of view are explained in the following paragraphs. On one hand, there are several reasons behind improving railway lines between mega Cities.
First
 and foremost, if the
government
 spends on making railway tracks it will be very beneficial for numerous civilians because job handed
people
 use
transportation
services
 on daily basis. So, time will reduce and get more leisure time to spare on effective activities.
Moreover
, humankind acquires lots of new facilities and obtain better
services
 comparatively.
For example
, in the ,past there were not enough trains between Mumbai and Delhi but at ,present there is an en number of trains which are available at various timings. Eventually, layman finds it very useful and
also
 effective steps taken by authorities are helpful up to some extent.
On the other hand
, there are two sides to a coin.
Firstly
, there are ample
services
 that are not up to the mark at many places in India.
Therefore
,
people
 are suffering from various kinds of
transportation
 problems.
For instance
, in the rural area bus
services
 as well as train
services
 are not available so
government
 should look upon
this
 serious matters.
Secondly
, rural
people
 can't afford cars and personal vehicles.
Hence
, they are always preferring public transport in order to improve the infrastructure and decrease the price of tickets.
Lastly
, spend more and more remuneration on current
transportation
 because the situation is very critical at some places.So, currently improve those and
then
 go for a new one. In my opinion, the
government
 should spend enough money on public
transportation
 because it is a highly recommended service which everyone uses in their daily life.Even sometimes it is very challenging to find
transportation
services
 in difficult times. To conclude,
this
 essay has been explored from both sides with enough evidence which
finally
 allows me to pen down and state that
government
 should hire private companies for and provide enough Budget to improve means of transport for residents ,especially for commuters.
Submitted by rohitgohel2658 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: