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Governments should spend money on education than that of sports and recreation. Do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #education #sports #recreation
The diagram illustrates information about commuters using the underground station in London. Overall, the peak hours are at 8am and 6pm. A few passengers go to the terminus at 6am and 4pm. In the
first
 30 minutes of the
day
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 there is a steady increase in the number of passengers from 100 to 200, at 6. 30am the numbers rise sharply to 400 which is the greatest on that day .
However
, in the
next
 2 hours, the numbers decrease rapidly from 400 to just below 200.
Moreover
, from 10am to 2pm the statistic of those travelling rise steadily from 200 to 300. From there, the boarders' figure drops sharply to 100 which is the lowest throughout the day. Between 4pm and 6pm, the number of travellers increases sharply from approximately 100 to just below 400. From there, there is the reduction of customers, as they gradually fall to below 150. In the
last
 2 hours, there are fewer travellers.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • crucial aspect
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • social inequalities
  • socioeconomic backgrounds
  • educational infrastructure
  • long-term investment
  • public health
  • community engagement
  • increased tourism
  • sporting events
  • employment rates
  • skilled workforce
  • innovation
  • research
  • global issues
  • climate change
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