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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions

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Climate change is the main danger
human
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the human
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 race is facing in
this
 century,
also
 ocean levels are increasing
with
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 a fast pace. There are plenty of problems linked to
this
,
however
,
this
 essay will discuss the major problems, which is
flooding
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the flooding
a flooding
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 of residences-and probable solutions to
this
. Billions of people live
on
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in
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 the coastal area, so even some feet of change in the level of
water
 could be catastrophic.
Rise
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 in the temperature is one of the reasons
of
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melting
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the melting
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 of ice from
Himalayas
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the Himalayas
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 and Antarctica etc. results in
increase
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an increase
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 in sea-
water
 level causes many issues. People lose their property, assets and not to mention many become homeless. Unfortunately,
this
 reminds devastating moment
happened
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that happened
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 in Japan in
2011
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the 2011
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, Tsunami, many individuals lose their
family
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families
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, home, and
also
 hope. Calamity like
this
 is most of the time gods act so as a human we could only ease the suffering.
Possible
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A possible
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 solution to
this
 is to build
flood
 barriers.
Flood
 stoppers like dams
,
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apply
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 and floodgates ought to help
reducing
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reduce
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water
level
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levels
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 and possibly
flood
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floods
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. These
flood
 defenders should be located
such
 that
flood
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floodwater
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water
 will not reach
in
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populated
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a populated
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area
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areas
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.
Flood
 prone country, Srilanka, has built
such
 defenders,
also
 they have restricted people to build houses in the close vicinity of the
water
. To conclude, it is certainly true that because of
the
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global warming ocean levels are rising, but
flood
preventing
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prevention
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 techniques would help to reduce the suffering. Many countries must adopt
flood
 prevention techniques like Srilanka to save their citizens from catastrophe.
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