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To meet the growing needs of food for the increasing population, country should make use of edible insects as foods. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but affect negatively the nature too. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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In view of the expanding population and the corresponding growing needs for
food
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, some people suggest making use of edible
insects
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 as foods. Yet,
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 has become a controversial debate among countries.
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, the pros and cons of
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 proposed remedy will be discussed, followed by a personal opinion
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 with, eating
insects
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 can reduce the burden of global warming and the rapidly increasing population. The production of meat
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 as beef, pork and chicken produces a large number of greenhouse gases because raising cattle requires much time and
food
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.
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, lamentably, aggravates global warming.
Insects
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,
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, do not consume much
food
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 and are readily eaten by human beings.
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 undoubtedly meets the great demand for
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. Meanwhile, it does not cast a shadow over the alarming problem of global warming.
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,
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 may have negative effects on nature. If countries make use of edible
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 as foods,
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 chains may be disrupted since many
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 are the prey of various kinds of animals.
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 a distortion of the ecological cycle may render unforeseeable ramifications to nature.
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,
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 can result in huge damage to the ecosystem as it breaks the balance and will cause a large negative impact on the natural and environment. In the worst-case scenarios, some animals may not have enough
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 to feed themselves,
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 dying of starvation.
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, the increasing number of endangered species may
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 reduce the variability / diversity of the ecosystem. Overall, there are benefits and drawbacks to eating
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. While
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 solution can alleviate the issue of
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 shortage, it may bring unpredictable devastations to nature. Still, making use of
insects
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 is still worth thinking about, as long as
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 measure is coupled with appropriate technology.
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, ways that can only consume a small number of
insects
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 yet maximise their nutritional value; or technologies that artificially culture
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 from
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 can be put into practice.
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 may minimise the negative impacts and solve the worldwide issue of the lack of
food
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • edible insects
  • increasing population
  • food needs
  • unhealthy
  • negatively affect
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • nutritional value
  • sustainable
  • efficient
  • abundant
  • accessible
  • economic benefits
  • culinary diversity
  • social acceptance
  • cultural acceptance
  • allergies
  • health concerns
  • environmental impact
  • ethical considerations
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