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Some people say that computer have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. Discuss and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 say that the invention of
computers
 is one of the greatest humankind's inventions.
However
, other
people
 think that
computers
 make their
life
 more stressful. I agree with those
people
 who think that
computers
 brought many benefits and play a very important role in our modern
life
.
First
 of all, every company nowadays uses a computer to store its data and make different kinds of operations. It is very difficult to imagine
life
 without
computers
. A company would have to store millions of papers and documents.
Moreover
, a customer would have to wait hours to check his balance or get a piece of information about his transactions at his bank, while an employee was looking through those papers. Another important aspect of
this
 is that
people
 are able to type all their information, make corrections, print or send documents using
computers
. It makes
life
 much easier. One can spend the rest of the time watching TV with his family or working on something new.
Second
 of all,
computers
 provided a great means of communication - the Internet. I think it is the easiest and cheapest way to get in touch with relatives, friends, business colleagues, etc. Nowadays the world becomes smaller and smaller. When I was a little girl, I could not imagine that it would be possible to communicate with
people
 from all around the world in
such
 an easy way. A person can get the latest news, become friends with someone from another country, find his old friends, ask for a piece of advice, etc. To sum up, I believe that
computers
 made our lives easier. They change our attitude towards
life
. I think with the invention of
computers
people
 became closer and friendlier.
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