In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case?

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Today, even though agriculture is developed very fast, many individuals in the world still go hungry. I will explain the reason for
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phenomenon and give a solution to
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problem.
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, I think, the reason
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this
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situation occurs is
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many environmental problems and natural
disasters
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still
disturbing
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farming.
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, in Japan, every year
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happen significantly frequently.
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,
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number of agricultural facilities were destroyed by these
disasters
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, after
earthquakes
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and floods,
people
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have
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no place to live,
also
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couldn't have sufficient food by
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huge loss and tragic situation.
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, regarding the solution
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these problems, I think the
government
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and respectively industries should take
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responsibility and make some
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or ideas
on
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reducing the hungry
people
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.
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, in Japan, the Japanese
government
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improved serval policies and insurance for hungry
people
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that suffered from
disasters
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such
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as
earthquakes
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and floods.The
government
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will invest in the factories and local farm corporates to reconstruct the factories that were destroyed in
disasters
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and operate experts in different industries,
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foods to local places to support individuals refugees.
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, scientists could go to the area to help the farmland back to the welfare soil that can farm again.
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, the good result of
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solution could take a long time
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but still can help hungry
people
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in a critical hard time. In conclusion, in my opinion, I think the reason for the hungry
people
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phenomenon could be natural
disasters
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such
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as
earthquakes
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and floods.
On the other hand
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, I believe
government
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and many industries experts could help those
people
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and try to make local places back to the welfare environment again.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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