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Some people think that the government should spend as much money as possible on protecting the environment. Others think this money should be spent on other things such as education and healthcare. Which one of these opinions do you agree with?

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agree 1. environment is the place that generates food and breathing air for
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. the state should preserve
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, nature nowadays is treated by the intruders of forest and deteriorated because of the rise of population and demand for food. To illustrate, a recent survey from BBC Broadcasting indicated that more than 50% of wild animals have lost their habitats due to the forest invasion.
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, it is suggested that the states should preserve the environment at all cost
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 financial conditions of each nation.
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