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In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

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There is a controversial perspective heating a debate on whether the increasing
number
 of people choose to purchase imported cuisine
instead
 of local
food
.
This
 essay is devoted to the underlying reasons, followed by some equivalent effective actions. On the one hand, there are certain reasons
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 why many people tend to buy
food
 produced internationally rather than local
products
.
Firstly
, imported
food
 has been famous for its high quality and has had a reputation from all around the world. Every foreign product has to pass the strict inspection at the broader gates and organizations. It was believed to bring the healthiest and freshest
food
 to meet
consumer’s
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consumers’
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 needs.
For example
, the Na Uy salmon has been certified organic by the ministry of public health and avoided using synthetic chemicals.
This
 would make most consumers satisfied with the quality of the salmon from Na Uy as well as
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 to be the salmon’s widest distributor for nearly 100 countries in the world.
On the other hand
, many actions should be implemented in order to boost the
number
 of customers choosing domestic
products
. Local
food
’s companies should put emphasis on
their
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 prominent features of the product
,
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 while expanding marketing campaigns. Many advantages
such
 as
food
’s price and quality should be highlighted so that these
products
 would become more familiar with the customers. Omachi noodle perfectly exemplifies
this
 situation.
This
 brand published a huge
number
 of short videos on TV, which were used to advertise for their fresh ingredients and affordable price.
Consequently
, after a few months, Omachi became popular and received a huge amount of positive feedback from customers. In conclusion, there are underlying reasons behind why many citizens tend to choose imported
food
instead
 of domestic
food
, while some actions should be taken to climb the
number
 of people choosing local
products
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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