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A formal letter to your school director in which you suggest starting an ancient club

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Dear
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 Smith, I am writing to suggest an idea which I consider beneficial for the school and its community. According to me, an Ancient Civilisations Club should be established. To start with, extra-curricular activities have a lot of positive effects on students. A lot of young people search for a way to enjoy their passions but through a productive and educational method. In a world like ours, it is important to understand
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ancient civilizations. In order for someone to understand people today, they have to know the ancient ones. I propose that the club has 20 places for students. Our historian teacher,
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 Parker, can be our instructor because she is keen
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 on ancient civilizations. The meetings of the club can be held twice a week after school and in one of our classrooms. I hope that my suggestion will be considered. I look forward to receiving your opinion. Yours sincerely, Elena Borisova
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