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Write an essay expressing your opinion about the importance of art in the school curriculum

#importance #art #school #curriculum
In
school
 there are a lot of subjects, some of them very useful,
other
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 not so much. But does it mean that
students
 should put their interest after teachers’ judgement? In my
opinion
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 doing what you love is as important as improving your language or math skills. To start with, drawing is relaxing for
students
’
nerve
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 system. It is scientifically proven that people who practice sketching are calmer and more productive. So,
students
 will have more motivation and energy to study for the other subjects after one relaxing class.
Furthermore
, art isn’t just about drawing. In
this
group
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students
 could do everything that their imaginations can think of- layouts of buildings,
colorful
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 and interesting clothes. In pairs or bigger groups, they could make amazing things. By doing
this
, they improve their talking skills and
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others, which is more important for
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life after
school
. Of course, learning history, literature and other language
is
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 really important. Sometimes there isn’t enough time for the material
that is
 intended to be taken, so, taking an extra class is needed. And
instead
 of staying at
school
 more hours often teachers and
students
 replace classes like art and PE with the more significant ones. I believe, there is enough time for everything if there is a willingness. And bereaving the
students
 from their relaxing classes like art is going to make their
school
 day worse, more boring and will not do anything but kill their energy for the day.
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