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Some people argue that the government should spend money only on medical care and education but not on theatres or sport stadium.Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #money #care #education #theatres #sport #stadium
Medical care and education is
a
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apply
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necessary
factor
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factors
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of
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in
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 daily life, but not only
it
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apply
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could be helping in the health of a person. Health means being well
on
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apply
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both physically and mentally. So in order to be
active
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,active
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 there must be entertainment. Of course
government
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the government
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 should spend money on schooling, but it did not mean that they shouldn't spend on enjoyment factors. It is
also
 a source for many people to earn money. Apart from
this
 a good amount of talented men
as well as women
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, as well as women,
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 are getting an opportunity to show
there
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their
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 abilities.
Majority
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The majority
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 of the citizen will say
medical
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the medical
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 sector is more important, by the
way
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,way
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 my opinion is
same
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the same
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 too.
Yeah
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,Yeah
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 they should be
care
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careful
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 about the
theaters
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theatres
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 and
sport
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sports
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 stadiums.
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