Some people say that individuals who make a lot of money are the most successful. Others think that those who contribute to society like scientists and teachers are more successful. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

Some say that the best way to succeed is

earning

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lots of

money

. Others insist that it is better to get success by contributing to society rather than it. I am to start to discuss

about

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this

sentence.

Money

is an important key to

live

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living

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in modern society, the amount of

money

is very related to happiness. If we get a lot of

money

, we can do many things we want,

also

it may be able to be respected by

public

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the public

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.

For example

, there are many people who do lotteries to acquire lots of

money

.

In addition

, we can often see that those who are

rich

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a rich

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escape from economic difficulties

thus

it can be

showed

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that they are quite relaxed. Through

this

effect, they are

more

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easier to help the poor by giving

some

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them some

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money

.

However

, I can tell that achievement or respect can become

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the results

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results

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result

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of winners and they are not able to be gotten by things like

economic

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the economic

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part. People who contribute their own abilities to the public in the world have existed. Scientists,

for instance

, have developed many things which are necessary

in

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our life. Thanks to them, most people have respected those who help to make a better life standard. To sum up, sometimes

money

is a

center

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centre

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of success but sometimes contributing to the world is more successful. In my opinion, it is really hard to live without

money

these days, so I firmly say that having a lot of

money

is more important for success than contributing to society.