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Some people think that companies should provide employees with exercise time during the day. What is your opinion?

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The graphs illustrate the development of
computers
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 possession from the years 2002 until 2010 based on two variables, which is the
computers
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 ownership rates based on population and educational degrees. Overall, from the
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 2002 until 2010, the
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 of
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 sales are increasing gradually for both variables.
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, from the
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 2022 until 2010, the
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 of people owning a computer is increased by two-tenths with the average percentage being 5
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 per
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. In the
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 2002,
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 ownership is fifty-five
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,
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, for the
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 2020, the
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 reaches seventy-five
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.
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, based on educational degrees, all the
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 is increased. the highest increase from the
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 2002 until 2010 is high school graduates and colleges students with three-tenths for both of them. Meanwhile, the lowest growth are bachelors degrees and postgraduate with twenty
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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