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Smoking is not only harm to smoker but also those who are near by.Therefore smoking should banned in public places. To what extend do you agree or disagree

#harm #smoker #places
Everyone agrees that smoking is hazardous to
health
. It will not only affect the smoker but
also
 harms
people
 who breathe in the smoke. I completely
agree
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 the statement that smoking should be banned in public related
areas
such
 as schools, toilets, bus interchanges..etc because it gives only negative effects on both country's economic and individual
health
.
To begin
 with as thinking of a government that public
health
 is standing as a major role to be a developed country. It is no doubt that smoking provides lots of
health
 issues
such
 as lung cancer, diabetes, oral cancer ..etc.
As a result
,
this
 makes government spend more budget on the public
health
 care sector. One of the effective methods, in order to reduce
people
's smoking habits and to care about public
health
, is to prohibit smoking in common
areas
.
For instance
, in Singapore, smoking is not allowed in all public
areas
 both indoors and outdoors unless designated place to smoke. Another factor to consider is smoking costs you a lot for
health
 as well as financial issues as an individual problem. Nowadays, the price of a pack of cigarettes is almost 15$ in Singapore. It will drain your income by spending that unnecessary stuff in your daily life.
Also
, it is not cheap for medical expenses if you have smoking-related diseases.
Moreover
, the nicotine produces from a cigarette affects the
people
 who breathe it in.
Therefore
, it occurs numerous defects in both smokers and their surrounding
people
 especially pregnant women and elderly
people
.
Thus
, it should be a problem by doing an act of a person affects to others and love ones. From my point of view, avoiding smoking in crowded places shows respect to other non-smokers. As
such
 it can be concluded that removing the habit of smoking in non-private
areas
 is a good practice for smokers and
also
 promotes
health
 for the public.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • Finally
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  • In general

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