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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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There are different
people
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 in the world now. Some
people
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 like to eat in different
places
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. Some prefer to eat only in
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. I think it is better to eat in the same
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. Many
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 like to eat in different
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 because they can adapt to any
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 and they get bored of eating in the same
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 . As they like to eat everywhere, their worldview will
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.
Such
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people
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 eat there
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as
 new
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 open because they like to eat in different
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.
People
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 of
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 type make friends in many
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 .
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 why they eat in new
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. And if they enjoy the
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, they can visit again.
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people
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 are actually very happy,
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 they spend most of their lives
traveling
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 with family and friends. They love to travel and visit many
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.
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 of
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 type are rare. And they spend their lives as they please. I think
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good quality.
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,
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people
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 often go to the same
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 and they eat in the same
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 all the time. They do not like to eat anywhere else, because they get used to where they eat . They avoid diversity. Because they do not like it.
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they
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 go to a restaurant with their family, they will choose that
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 with their family.
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 why they always eat there. In conclusion, a lot of
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 like to eat in different
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, which is good and some
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 love to eat in the same
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, In my view, it is even better and I agree with that
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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