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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of advertisements which try to persuade children to buy snacks, toys, and other goods. Parents often claim that these ads are unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Social media that contain
advertisements
 become a huge impact
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 uneducated society who are in the vulnerable segment. I will discuss both
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this
 essay. While there is no doubt that inappropriate content is leading to bad
behavior
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, I totally agree with
this
 statement. An
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argument
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favor
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 of some
advertisements
 have inappropriate contents that mislead children
to
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wrong
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 ways.
This
 is because it persuade them to consume bad products
such
 as colourful candy or cartoon shape of
cookie
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the cookie
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 so, it
result
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to
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 bad health
in
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 younger age. Another objection is that they are too fragile to
recieve
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receive
 sensitive
contents
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 so
that
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they could behave badly by following social media.
This problems
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 could lead to the worst result.
For instance
, they could commit a crime with innocent thought referring to
reserch
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research
 conducted by
government
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 in Thailand in 2022
Although
 some people argue that creative
advertisements
 could cause bad things to kids, we should consider that it is
parent
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parents
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 obligation to educate their children.
In addition
, they should be able to guide and lead them to the right way by giving them clear explanations of
those advertisement
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that advertisement
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.
This
 situation is made better because they will have
plently
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plenty
 good experience which
discourage
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 them from unhealthy food, unnecessary goods and bad
stuffs
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stuff
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. In short,
many
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kind
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 of
advertisements
cause
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 serious problems that affect to
specific
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 group of people in
term
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 of social issues and well-being. If we ban
inappropiate
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inappropriate
contents
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,
childrend
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children
 would be
more safe
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 and solve some difficult situations.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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