Many adults do very little exercise. Some people believe that showing sporting events like Olympics and world cup will encourage adults to exercise more. Others think there are better ways to encourage adults do exercise. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Most adults have no
time
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and do little
exercises
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today. Many think that if TV shows sports like
world
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cup
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will make them
to
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exercise
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and some think adults can be encouraged to by
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another method
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. I will discuss both
the
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views and provide my opinion.
Firstly
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, life is busy and
people
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have no
time
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to think of exercises.
People
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have
tight
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workload
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work load
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and life is hard and busy
everyday
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when they get
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time
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they like to watch things on Tv for relaxation like
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web series or movies or even
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world
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the world
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cup
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. But watching
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world
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the world
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cup
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can not make
adult
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adults
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to
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do
exercise
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. On the other side, there can be other ways to make
people
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exercise
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. If
office
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the office
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has a gym in the location and
inform
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staff to
exercise
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during office hours for
half hour
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can make
people
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take a break and
exercise
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.
Also
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, small companies can get somebody to speak about how good
exercise
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is and how it can help
people
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take care of
the
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weight problems. In total, many
people
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love to watch sports like
Olympics
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the Olympics
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or
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world
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the world
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cup
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but only some
people
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go and
exercise
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after watching. Even if they do
its
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only for some
time
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. But, if organisation encourage
people
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and use some office
time
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to take a break to work out
may be
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maybe
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a good way in my opinion.
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