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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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There are creative
people
 which like to try new and different
things
such
 as travelling
interesting
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 places, eating antique dishes,
however
, there are
also
people
 who are afraid of taking
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a risk
the risk
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risk
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risks
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 and prefer to keep doing
things
 they are familiar with.
To begin
 with the
first
 type of
people
,
they
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are interested in everything
that is
 new or attractive and do not fear
from
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doing them. They like to test themselves in complicated
things
 and get energy, motivation from doing
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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 of activities. They travel around the world, learn
culture
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about culture
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 and taste national meals
of
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from
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 different countries.
Life
 becomes boring for them without
such
 kind of actions. They
also
 often change their specialization and work in various fields.
World
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 outlook of them is wide as those
people
 encountered colourful situations before. The
second
 type of
people
 do not like changes and prefer doing
things
 which are familiar
for
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to
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 them. It is difficult to reach success for
these kind
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this kind
these kinds
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 of
people
,
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 because they do not want to take
risk
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risks
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 in their
life
. These
people
 are used to
do
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doing
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the same
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same
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some
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things
 and it will be difficult if their
life
 has alteration.
Also
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,Also
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 these
people
 have a problem with finding their place in society as there are being changes now. To conclude, in my
opinion
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,opinion
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 the
first
 group of
people
 is more successful than the
second
 one in society. Because they do not fear
from
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apply
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taking
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a risk
the risk
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risk
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risks
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 and they enjoy
from
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their
life
 by doing new and interesting
things
. So I prefer to do new activities
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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