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Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#education #university #government #students
The onus of paying
tax
 to the government is common for individuals in modern society.
Nevertheless
, whether or not
people
 should hand in
tax
 to the state may be controversial. To my mind,
people
 are responsible to pay
tax
 to support their states. In the following, I will discuss both views and consider the reasons why
tax
 is necessary for states. 1: States need money to construct the infrastructure and maintain the security of their cities so as to increase the wellbeing of individuals. 2: The dearth of
tax
 might not enable some impoverished
people
 to afford the necessities in the long run because the balance of economic distribution in society will be broken and affluent
people
 become richer while the situations of the poor become worse. In conclusion, not only would the wellbeing of individuals be increased by paying
tax
, but
also
 the economic balance could prevent from being broken. In my view, if the rich can hand in more
tax
 to the state, they will have more opportunities to earn money in peaceful society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic background
  • equitable society
  • government-funded
  • higher quality standards
  • financial limitations
  • inefficiencies
  • wasteful spending
  • cost-effective
  • innovate
  • undervaluing
  • dropout rates
  • financial burden
  • well-being
  • higher education uptake
  • increased taxes
  • reallocation
  • vital sectors
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